Some young people are leaving the countryside to live in cities and towns, leaving only old people in countryside? What problems does this cause? What can be done to solve this problem?

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number of

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generation are leaving the countryside to relocate in urban cities and towns leaving behind older generation group.

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will lead to several problems.

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occurring

due to

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and what steps can be taken to resolve

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issue.

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with, many youngsters often tend to shift

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urban

areas

once they complete their education. And the most prominent reason for

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of employment

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opportunities

in rural

areas

. As urban

areas

are developed it has

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to offer like

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job

oppourtunites

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opportunities

, comfortable lifestyle, better education and much more which fascinates the youngsters to leave remote

areas

and settle in big cities.

However

this

will have an adverse effect on rural

areas

. As there will be no young people to work which will affect the economy of the

areas

and they will remain undeveloped. Despite

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the problems government can take

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certain

steps to tackle the situation. Creating job opportunities in remote

areas

would be

most

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effective solution. Not only the job

opportunites

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opportunities

government

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the government

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should

also

focus on improving infrastructure, construction of roads and hospitals , better education system

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will not only reduce the number of youth migration but will

also

bring

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of these rural

areas

. In conclusion, the immigration of youth is

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concern. government should take action on

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improving

the lifestyle of

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the countryside

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for young people to live happily with

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their

families and not leaving

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hometown to pursue

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their

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