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University students should pay in full for their own education instead of the society funding their studies. The reason is that individuals tend to benefit after graduation more than society. To what extent do you agree or disagree? Give your own opinion.

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It is believed by some people that
students
 who want to pursue education in the university must pay the fees by themselves rather than the community helping them in funding.
Although
 these people argue about the advantages
students
 get after graduation, I disagree with their statement. Many
students
 want to build a great career in life by studying tertiary education. Unlike some rich background scholars, many
struggle
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 to afford college fees. When
the
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apply
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society funds them in their study, it helps them to carry on their education without any economic pressure.
In other words
,
students
 can deeply focus on their career development rather than working day and night to pay for university. In Australia, the US and UK, many
students
 shift their focus on earnings rather than in study because society does not fund their reading. Paying the money for studying in the university is a big economic challenge to
students
. To clarify, many tertiary institutions are highly expensive to afford and to obtain a degree from them,
students
 are sometimes involved in short term money making ideas
such
 as poker or criminal activities
such
 as drug selling.
Therefore
, many
students
 end up in jail while studying.
For instance
, in a recent 7news channel broadcast, an Indian student was caught scamming people because of
eagerness
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 to earn money quickly. In conclusion, the belief of benefits that individuals will get after finishing study is arguable as many
end
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 up their important time in life deviating apart from books.
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