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today many self driving vehicles are become more available. Some people thing this good thing, others disagree. give your opinion

#self #vehicles #people
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in
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today, Technology has given
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persons
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 life a huge impact, and
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easy access
having
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a
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computer operated
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 vehicles becomes debatable. It is argued the positive and negative
effect
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to
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 the person.
This
 essay agrees
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 the statement mentioned above that automated intellectual cars are beneficial to the community because it is well-programmed and make
the
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human activity easier. Since modern technology started to
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, Many new inventions and updated version has been running in the market
such
 as cellphone,
computer
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, and car which make
people
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 activity
simplier
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simpler
.
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, AI cars are designed to help people
in
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 the
road
 and save more time, since the
computer
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programed
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 to drive, the person can access different
task
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 like
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last
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the last
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 minute edit of the presentation.
Furthermore
, the
computer
 cars are
also
well-programed
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 on the
road
,
therefore
 traffic and
road
accident
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 can
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.
For instance
, it can detect the nearest alternative
road
 when traffic, and if there is
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 it can immediately reverse and not go
further
 in the accident area. In conclusion, I agree that it has a positive effect
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person
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 about
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self driving
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 vehicle because it can make
people
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 life easier and well-programmed and tested.
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