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As public safety is of the highest importance. it is often necessary to test new products on animals. It is befter for a few animals to suffer than for human life to be placed at risk by untested products. To what extent do you agree with above?

Nowadays,
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 our developing country,
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 many new
products
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are launch
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launch
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 in the market.
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, before that
people
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, people
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 need to attempt first. Because it is very important for
public
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the public
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. As a society ,safety
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is very important to experiment with new
products
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 on
animals
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 compared to humans. I agree with
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 statement
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 essay will examine it in
upcoming
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the upcoming
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 paragraphs. To commence with, A certain part of society faces so many medical problems. And
that is
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 why he or she
take
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medicine in their regular
life
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.
if
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 that medicine was not tested on
the
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apply
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animals
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 or other
creatures
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creatures,
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then
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 the community's lives are in danger and
also
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 affect the population.
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,
human
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the human
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 species and
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the animals
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animals
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animal
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 species are
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somewhat Some
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Some
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 same. So it is helpful to the public that tested on
animals
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.
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, it is
good
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better
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 for a few
animals
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 to suffer than for millions of
humans
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human lives
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life
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.
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,
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 to
trial
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 new things on the same creature is preferable to risking human
life
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.
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,
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 the
corona
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coronavirus
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 pandemic,
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 countries' scientists were busy in creat vaccines. And they try that vaccine on some birds, wild
animals
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 and so on.
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,
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 many creatures were dead because of these tests.
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,
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 is more important to test new things or
products
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 on
animals
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 than the people's
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life
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lives
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.
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,
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apply
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 to using untested
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products
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products,
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 humans face so
problems
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many problems
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. In conclusion, human
life
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 is a risk
,
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apply
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 if they are using
products
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 that are not tested properly.
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, I believe that harming a few
animals
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 is better than risking human
life
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.

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