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Some people argue that spending a lot of money holding birthday parties, wedding parties and other celebration is a waste of money. However, others believe such parties are important for individuals and for society. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

#people #money #birthday #parties #celebration #waste #individuals #society
Parties are a way of celebrating happy and
memory
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memorable
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 events with family and friends.
People
 can have programs for different occasions
such
 as
birthdays
 and weddings etc. Many
people
 celebrate
birthdays
 and weddings for themselves and relatives because they want to show their affection and take photos of happy times. Mostly, children and young
people
 are excited about their birthday because they will get a lot of gifts. We make plans and celebrate
birthdays
 like festivals for our kids, his cousins and classmates were
also
 invited. My son was very happy, as everybody attending the party
bring
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brought
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 good gifts.
However
, wedding functions are mostly for adults, and it is a rule in every culture that
for
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apply
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the wedding party will organize like formal event and invite their relatives on the special so that they can share and make a good memory.
However
, there is a problem with celebrating as it costs a lot of money. It is better to help or to donate the amount to the poor
people
 and get the blessings and well wishes than spending too much money for weddings.
Also
,
people
 show off and have big birthday and marriage parties after the ritual.
This
 is making it very difficult for normal
people
 to celebrate important occasions. So,
people
 get depressed because they don’t have too much money to have a big party. To conclude, celebrating wedding or
birthdays
 are important because it is a very good way to make a memory and take a photo in good clothes to see in the future. But, taking
a bank loans
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a bank loan
bank loans
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 to celebrate is not good and
people
 show spending based on how much they have.
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