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some people think that hosting an international sports event is good for the country, while some people think it is bad. discuss both views and state your opinion?

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some
people
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 believe that hosting an international
sports
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event
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bring
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brings
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lot
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 of benefits for countries while other
person
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people
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 think that it has some disadvantage .
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point
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 of view.
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 of all, there are advantages of hosting an international
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event
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 a global
event
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 contributes to
increase
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 tourist income.it is clear that big
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event
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attract
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 a
lot
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 of
people
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this
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events
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 businesses will have
increase
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 or develop their profits. it
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 creates more
employments
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employment
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 opportunities for
peoples
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 of that
country
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.
for example
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- organize any global sorts
event
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 governments should recruit a
lot
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 of
peoples
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 which creates more employment opportunities for the
people
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. on
ther
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the
 other hand, some
people
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 argue that global
sports
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events
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results
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 in
loss
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 of money and time for the government and it
require
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 a
lot
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 of money to get prepared for
thats
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that
that's
events
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. to host
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events
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 in any
country
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 have to invest a
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 of money
for
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 infrastructure and they have to
preparing
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 the grounds for
gaming
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event
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. so that
country
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people
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 think that investing in these international
sports
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event
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instead
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 they want their
governmentto
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government to
 invest in some other
thingswhich
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things which
 can help to reduce the poverty rate of that
country
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. in
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view
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views
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 of international
gamng
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gaming
events
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 organize is more advantages.and
from
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in
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opinion
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 every
country
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 hosting
sports
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events
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 is more helpful not for the
people
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 of the
country
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 but
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 for the
country
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Topic Vocabulary:
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  • national pride
  • cultural showcase
  • inspire a generation
  • temporary boost
  • environmental concerns
  • sustainable planning
  • public funds
  • divert resources
  • tourism influx
  • job opportunities
  • sports development
  • public health
  • construction
  • strategic investment
  • global audience
  • hospitality
  • public services
  • cost-benefit analysis
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