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Some people believe that students go to school at very early age, whereas others believe that they should not go to school untill they get old. Discuss both the views nd give ur opinion

It is irrefutable fact that the
school
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 plays an essential role in every
child
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life
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 in
this
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 contemporary era. The world stands polarized into two contrasting perspectives where one group of society vehemently deems that students should go to
educational
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the educational
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institution
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 at a very early
age
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.
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, others
rekon
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reckon
reason
 that they should not go to the
school
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 unless they get old. As per my point of view, offsprings should begin their academic at early
age
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 bcz it is beneficial for them.
This
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 essay will cast light on both
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perspectives which will be elaborated
in
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 the upcoming paragraphs. Commencing with the former view, there are copious benefits to
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 in
school
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 at
early
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age
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. The
first
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 and foremost is
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. It is good for them to
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in
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 early
age
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 because at that time they have
good
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 brain power and they can easily understand each and every calculation, practical and theoretical concept and many more.
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, at early
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 pupils
have
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 not much responsibility
about
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 finance, career and many more.
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 why
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they
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then
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they
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 can easily become proficient in
academic
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academics
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. Apart from that, if they join a
school
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 at
early
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age
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,
then
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 they can take a park in
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extracurricular
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extra curricular
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 activities and improve their talent and overcome some hidden skills. To elaborate latter view, there are umpteen drawback, if offsprings are not going to the
school
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 unless they get old
age
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.
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, they cannot easily understand all the things because their
brain power
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 and many other skills are not much good as compared to children.
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, they cannot study well because they have lots of responsibilities like career responsibility, family worries and financial issues.
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, they may
lost
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their
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 all ability and some educational institute are not allowed to
enroll
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 at old
age
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. Looking at the all aforementioned views, it can be reiterated that students should join their educational institute at
early
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an early
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age
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 because it is beneficial for them
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 learning at childhood rather than get old
age
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 in order to become proficient in their life.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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