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People aim to keep a balance between their work and other parts of their lives, but few people achieve it. What are the problems in trying to achieve this goal and how can these problems be overcome?

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Nowadays people struggling in order to have a balance between their work life and family, but few of them are able to find
this
. In my opinion, there are a lot of factors involved in
this
 question and in
this
 essay, I will relate them.
First
 of all, I believe that
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 each person has their own personal circumstances that could lead them to an awkward situation. I mean, it is quite difficult to try to find
this
 balance between work and personal life if, as a woman, you should take care of your children and at the same
time
, you should be hundred per cent productive at work. The lack of
time
 is
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this
 case the main problem that does not allow them to have a balance in their
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lives
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.
Secondly
, we should
also
 consider that our current society has made us more competitive.
Moreover
, we have more responsibilities and it is traduced into a decreasing of our leisure
time
.
However
, we usually think that the more
time
 we spend at the office, the more productive we are and in my opinion,
this
 is where the mistake is. The general misconception which makes an association between success and job has transformed us into workaholics citizens. Even though we have money to spend, we do not have
time
 to do it. To conclude
this
 essay, I believe that, the best way to solve these problems is trying to be more aware that
time
 is a precious thing that we have and if we improve its quality, we are
also
 improving our life.
Nevertheless
, I
also
 believe that governments are in part responsible for
this
 and they should elaborate laws that permit people to have more leisure and free
time
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