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Compare the advantages and disadvantages of three of the following as media for communicating information. State which you consider to be the most effective. • comics • books • radio • television • film • theatre

#three #media #information #comics #books #radio #television #film #theatre
As we all know that media is under siege these days , speaking the truth has become more important.
Although
,
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 many media sources are out there, I believe television, radio and films reach the public faster and more effectively.
World
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 has become more of a visual place than reading .visuals are processed so quickly, they cause
a faster and stronger reactions
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faster and stronger reactions
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 than words. Televisions are one of the vital sources which bring the
news
 to our homes.
News
 from every nook and corner of the
world
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 International
news
, sports ,entertainment, advertisements and etc
thus
 by the invention of satellites
world
 has become a global village.
Nevertheless
,
over watching
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 can cause health issues, time management problems and spreading of false
news
 are some of the disadvantages to name . As we are getting busier day by day , radios have a remarkable way of helping us by getting to know what's happening around the
world
moreover
 songs and programs which help us relive the stress while
traveling
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 or working.
In
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 the other hand noise pollution,
spreading
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the spreading
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 of false
news
 are some of the
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downsides
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down sides
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. Films are a
multidollar
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multi dollar
multi-dollar
 industry. Hollywood ,Bollywood and films from various parts of the
world
 tell stories to reach the community and to the
world
 at large. The stories they bring to the big screen has more outreach in the public who embrace the entertaining
world
However
,
this
 can have both negative and positive impact on
the
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society. To conclude I think televisions, home theatres have more impact on
the
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society. They bring the
news
 to our doorsteps , easy accessibility and a media we all prefer .
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