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Some people choose to eat no meat or fish. They believe that this is not only better for their own health but also benefits the world as a whole. Discuss this view and give your own opinion.

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This
 graph provides the information of the percentages of income and 3 different types of people in the UK and USA who spend on petrol,
such
 as poorest, middle-income, and richest. It can obviously observe that the poorest populations in
America
 spend on petrol between 0.5% and 2.7% of their earnings.
In contrast
, the poorest populations in the United Kingdom spend on
fuel
 only 0.5% to 2.7% of their earnings.
Therefore
, we may assume that the poorest populations in the United Kingdom usually use public transportation systems rather than drive their own cars.
In contrast
, the poorest families in the United States usually like to drive their own cars. Middle-income societies living in the United Kingdom buy their
fuel
 between 2.71% and 3.7% of their salary while middle-income societies living in the United States purchase their
fuel
 only from 5% to 3.7% of their salary. We can see that middle-salary communities in
America
 tend to use more public transportation systems in real life when we compare them with middle-salary societies in the UK.
Moreover
, from the graph, we see that the richest families in the UK purchase their average
fuel
 only 3.5% of their income while the richest communities who live in the USA have a tendency to decrease from spending their
fuel
 from 4% to 2.6% of income.
Moreover
, we may summarize that the more how people in
America
 can earn money, the fewer people in
America
 drive their own cars. On the
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Plant-based diet
  • Chronic diseases
  • Greenhouse gas emissions
  • Deforestation
  • Water consumption
  • Mitigate climate change
  • Natural resources
  • Animal welfare
  • Humane and ethical choice
  • Healthcare costs
  • Sustainable farming
  • Legumes
  • Fruits and vegetables
  • Vegetarian
  • Vegan
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