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Today, advanced science and technology have made great changes to people’s lives, but artists such as musicians, painters, and writers are still highly valued. What can the arts tell us about life that science and technology cannot?

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Nowadays, developments in
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 have brought about a revolutionary transformation in every aspect of our daily
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, artists are still greatly valued. The essay will delve deep into what the
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 can tell us about
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 where
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 does not venture. To commence with,
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 and
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 are an instrument. It is in fact the greatest ever.
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 is a type of approach of investigation that provides us with explanations, theories, and predictions. With
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, we can forecast weather, develop vaccines, explain the motions of the planets, improve living standards and so forth. It provides us with what we want. So handy is
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 and so good can it be used to attain our goals that an individual might be enticed to deem it is all we want. But what watching a movie, or reading a novel or poetry really has for us! And what about the rationale of music, painting, or even philosophy in our
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 if they fail to produce some meaningful effects that humans could relate to or enjoy? Like all other things,
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, we have to determine what we want to do with “
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” in our
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.
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 and
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 help humankind get what they want but does not dictate what we want. It does not help us determine the use to which it ought to be put. If
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 cannot tell us the code of ethics, where does mankind find that out? In
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 case,
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 can yield the answer. We can find values in literature and movies, in music, in poetry, and even in sculpture. These things tell us what is right and what is wrong, how fellow human beings are to be related, how to appreciate from different perspectives, how to be reflective and self-critical, and even what beauty is.
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 give us pure joy and let us express ourselves without being formal artists. Art is a part of
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, not like
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 which is something to enhance our
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. It seems reasonable to draw the conclusion that while
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 alone cannot solve the mystery of the universe,
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 teach us how to communicate with it.
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