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These days people pay more attention to famous film stars than to famous scientists. Why is this happening? Explain the trend giving reasons and examples to support your opinion.

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Nowadays individuals focus closer on well know movie stars than on honoured
scientists
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 because of
people
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 are more attracted to film stars and
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 social
media
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 like Facebook,Instagram,etc..,are promoting VIP persons
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 of Nobel
scientists
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 and
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 there are so many reasons the
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 didn'
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 pay attention to the
scientists
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.In the following ,paragraphs I will discuss with examples and state my opinion below. Mostly the
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 plays a vital role in the publicity of celebrities.Overnight the
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 can make any person into a celebrity .Through the power of social ,
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 they can be entertaining
people
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 and they let us know their lifestyle to their fans and their activities was mentioned on their web platform.They allow
people
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 insight into their life.
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,
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 are busy researching and experimenting with the tests .
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, somewhere researchers are at fault for not developing public interest in their discoveries. Another reason the
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 is not becoming famous is because of their lives they want to keep themselves in private they didn'
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 contact the
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 and
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 they can maintain secure life because of their researchings and their inventions . On the other ,hand celebrity is in contact with
people
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 through web platform they can interact with their fans so film stars are becoming more famous than
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.
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, famous actresses or actors are interacting with the fans on movie promotions and some other things but rather
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 are didn'
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 pay attention to attend the meets and conferences. In conclusion, social
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 and the actors who always interact with
people
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 and promote their films can lead them to become famous whereas
scientists
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 hold less interest in these activities ,so they didn'
t
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 get popular .
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