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In the future, nobody wiil buy printed newspapers or books because they will be able to read everything they want online without paying. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

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Nowadays, many books and
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 are no longer printed due to
its
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’ modernism. From my point of view,
i
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 agree with
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 statement and will provide
further
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To begin
 with, the advance of technology
is become
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 more expanding. many new start-up newspapers agency try to change people’s mindset to online reading. it is claimed because it is more efficient
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 most
of
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people
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. individuals
also
 do not need to spend any dime as it is free for
public
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. They could easily surf
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the internet
in
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 their smartphone or tablet and they could access any international or domestic news.
In addition
, ones could save more time because they do not need to put so much effort
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 going to the bookstore.
Furthermore
, it is said that online sources reduce
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paper
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to
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waste.
Besides
, a large number of people enjoy reading online publications because it
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 deforestation which is part of
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producing books.
For instance
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 continue to read online in the future, there will be less paper that ends up in landfill and
also
 it helps
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climate change
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 better. To sum up,
i
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 strongly agree that
majority
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 of people no longer spend too much money on reading printed books or
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 in the future because it helps our sustainable environmental friendly.
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