The growing number of overweight people is putting a strain on the health care system in an effort to deal with the health issues involved. Some people think that the best way to deal with this problem is to introduce more physical education lessons in the school curriculum. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

In

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modern era,an increasing number of obese people is

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of the main concerns of society which indirectly links to many health issues that are complicated to treat. To effectively reduce

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problem, some authorities think that implementing more physical

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in the school curriculum is

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of the best ways.

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, in my perspective, I do not fully agree with

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statement. Physical

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means sport,

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with more interactive

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with each other. Prior to introducing more sports classes, the ministry of

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needs to properly weigh study and curriculum equally. In conjunction, there's no doubt by increasing physical

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can increase the metabolism of a person which can reduce the fat level in the body and train a person to be more active mentally and physically. The advantages of these

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are significant marvellous. Despite the positive outcome, I personally disagree that increasing more physical

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can solve the obesity issue in

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country.

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, by implementing solutions that will not resolve the root cause fully, we need to know what is the cause of obesity and take action from there. I believed

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diet like fast food plays a huge role in increasing the number of overweight people. Promoting a healthy diet should be

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of the actions to be taken.

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, more physical

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mean less curriculum.

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will affect the study and learning time of an individual which will bring some negative impact to the country.

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, sports subjects and curricula should arrange in a way that will bring

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for everyone. In conclusion, the research and data from WHO concluded ASEAN has the highest rate of obese individuals. I strongly disagree that solely physical

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can solve

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worldwide issue.