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in the future all cars, buses and trucks will be driverless. the only people travelling inside these vehicles will be passengers. do you think the advantages of driverless vehicles outweigh the disadvantages? give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience

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As
driverless
 technology is mature in our generation, public transportation without divers
such
 as buses and trucks can be exerted shortly. In my point of view, though, there are few doubting voices over
this
 issue, I think the idea of
driverless
 buses and trucks is beneficial for our safety more than the potential risks it may bring. On the one hand, I truly believe that those heavy transportation
drivers
 should be replaced by technical
drivers
 for their risky driving skills and irresponsibility of human lives.
For example
, there are over 300 casualties caused by overspeeding bus
drivers
 and linking trunk
drivers
 every year in Taiwan.
Due to
 the protective laws for those occupational
drivers
, they can avoid lawsuits and fines for killing pedestrians;
moreover
, most of the time, committing murder is less of a burden for them compared to lifelong compensation for disabled individuals.
Consequently
, the comprehensive system of
driverless
 technology used in public transportation whereby people can be protected.
On the other hand
, false recognition of
driverless
 cars without human surveillance is possibly happening. The reason driving models are not comprehensively trained by database and previous accidental cases, they cause wrong identification, regardless. It still has the possibility of crashing with walking men or other cars, as same as some facial recognition still has the wrong operation nowadays. The percentage of happening,
however
, is near nothing, since
this
 skill is fully sophisticated in other applications in our lives,
besides
, the accident rate will not be beyond the human’s operation.
To sum up
, I think a safe shuttle environment can be anticipated in one to two decades with the credit of
driverless
 public transport.
Due to
 the uneven protection between the laws for different road users, and the nearly precise detection of AI
drivers
, the new generation of safe traffic is coming soon.
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content
Ensure all main points are supported with clear examples and evidence to strengthen the argument. For instance, provide more details about the technological advancements in driverless cars to support your point.
language
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tone
Consider acknowledging the potential counterarguments more explicitly and providing a more balanced view. This will make your discussion more comprehensive.
structure
You provided a clear introduction and conclusion, which frames your argument well.
content
The essay reflects a solid understanding of the topic and addresses the task prompt effectively.
analysis
You've addressed potential concerns with driverless technology, showing a nuanced perspective.

Support ideas with relevant, specific examples

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When giving examples it is best to put them after your main idea or topic sentence. They can be used in the middle of supporting sentences or they can be used to start a new sentence. There is no rule for where exactly to give examples in essays, logically they would come after your main idea/topic sentence or just after a supporting sentence.

Linking words for giving examples:

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  • for instance
  • to illustrate this
  • to give a clear example
  • such as
  • namely
  • to illustrate
  • take, for example

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • driverless vehicles
  • advantages
  • disadvantages
  • increased safety
  • reduced traffic congestion
  • improved efficiency
  • accessibility
  • disabled
  • elderly
  • job displacement
  • privacy concerns
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