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Some people think that children should learn to read from traditional paper books, while others feel that it is fine to start the reading process on an e-reader (like a Kindle or iPad). Discuss both sides and give your own opinion.

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Some people hold the view that it is best to convince
children
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 to study reading by providing paper
books
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 . While others argue that we should not necessarily choose
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 when we can choose another alternative i.e. e-readers like Kindle or iPad. I am in favour of a
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 opinion and in
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 essay,I will compare two sides of the arguments and draw some conclusions. On the one hand , a number of parents consider
books
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 as an important role in developing the ability to read .
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 to say , the nature of a book consists of the papers which smell good and the sound of the sheets and etc are the factors that provoke a sense of satisfaction and passion for youngsters and leads to better understanding the content and increase their memory to understand reading contents better.
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 , others believe that it is completely acceptable to allow
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 to use e-readers and it does not make any trouble in their process of learning .
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 ,
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 may refrain from paper
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 in their later life .
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, they can have all the libraries on their tablets and still can have the encouragement to read stories . In my opinion ,
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,it cannot deny the fact that paper
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 can give parents a sense of nostalgia , it is justifiable that online
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 facilitated the way of reading and a majority of
children
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 can benefit from it even those who live in urban areas which are deprived of book shops . In conclusion, weighing two sides of the arguments , I am in favour of the opinion that online reading not only is fine , but it
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 gives
children
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 a vast number of choices and they easily can choose a favourite topic to read it so we should not underestimate these devices .
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