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Online shopping like books groceries and air tickets have their advantage overweigh than disadvantages

As we live in the 20 th century, shopping has drastically changed the way it attracts
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customers. From shopping malls to window shopping people nowadays prefer online shopping meanwhile, with the outbreak of the pandemic, online websites have become more popular places to shop .In my opinion, buying things online has more advantages than disadvantages ,during the ongoing covid 19 outbreak . In today’s
world
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 we run a very busy life .Making purchases of our daily needs
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 groceries , medicines, clothes are just a click away with the help of internet websites . consumers can make use of
this
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 time to spend with the family, for hobbies, to stay fit and many more.
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 dissatisfaction
of
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 online purchased goods is one of the common
complain
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 we come across. Selling cheap ,
non- durable
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non-durable
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 and damaged goods had been the problem we face.
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, exchanging facilities are available it’s more
time consuming
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. In 2020 with the outbreak of covid 19 people have taken the liberty of using
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online shopping to
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 maximum. It had
help
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 us to maintain
the
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safety precautions, prevented
from
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unnecessary outings and saved us from getting infected. Buying books and online tickets are much better choices,
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addition
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 they give us
lot
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 of options, variety of selections and easy access .
Internet
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 has not only allowed us to buy our necessities but
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 has given us wide options available
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worldwide
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world wide
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worldwide
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. Marketing and demand of supply
is
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 maintained in every part of the world.
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, a person can choose to buy a branded watch for a better price , in a different country or a person can send a gift for a loved one who lives abroad. To conclude shopping era has redefined its platform by using websites
in
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 the internet. The upcoming generation
prefer
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as
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it’s easy accessibility, multiple choices, and prices which we can choose to buy.
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, lack of social interaction,
less
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outdoor
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out door
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 activities and social isolation are the key problems
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 we might have to face in the future.

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