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You have been doing some voluntery work to help your local community. However now you are unable to comtinue doing this job

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Dear Thomas, I am writing to you today because unfortunately, it has become difficult for me to remain active in my assigned role within the non-profitable organization.
Thus
, I will explain to you the exact reason for that.
First
 of all, let me give you an idea about my appointed
responsibilites
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responsibilities
. As you already know, I am a member of the Public Health committee of our organization "Egyptian
pharmacutical
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pharmaceutical
 student's federation".
Hence
, I am participating in awareness
campaings
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campaigns
campaign
 about
prevention
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 of infectious diseases spread and proper methods for using disinfectants in the nearby rural areas and villages.
Moreover
, despite not having exams at
this
 particular time of the year, I have started to work recently in a multination corporation and my shift is 8 hours a day.
In addition
, I already have another job that I have been doing for months, which is my freelance medical writer position on
Upwork
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 platform.
Therefore
, It would be
tremednously
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tremendously
 challenging for me to organize all of these tasks
simultanously
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simultaneously
. As an alternative, I suggest that you recruit my friend Shady, who is excited to
particpate
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participate
 in community service, and he has already shown a great
enthusiasim
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enthusiasm
 and dedication.
Finally
, I will be looking forward to your
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. You can reach me via email or phone call; simply contact me on 01094231591 or [email protected]. yours sincerely, Youssef Abo-Dahab
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