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Some people think that private schools have many advantages while others think there have many drawbacks for the community. Discuss both sides and give an opinion

#people #schools #community
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As a number of research, as well as any anecdotal evidence,pieces of ,evidence suggests that there are apparent merits of private
schools
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, some people think that it brings demerits for the communities.In
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 paragraphs will discuss both sides and I think more or less private
schools
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 are beneficiary for localities as they provide high standards and competition for government-funded institutions.
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, let us consider self-financed
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 ,which are managed by motivated trustees or owners for raising standards of
education
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 in society,providing well-trained and experienced teaching staff with all the necessary equipment required for better training of
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,these
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 follow the curriculum of well-reputed
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 from abroad which gives global recognition of local
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 these
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 make their
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 work hard after school by giving them a bunch of extra activities and homework.The drawback for these
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 is the cost of
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 and not affordable to common individuals.
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,Government
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 follow local standards of
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 so,their learning tools are remaining outdated for a number of occasions,their teaching staff do not have great energy in teaching as they lack motivation and never keep themselves updated.School buildings are out of renovations as well as much crowded with the high number of
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 because the teacher to
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 ratio is high.One good thing is they are open for everyone and affordability is not a question as they are publicly funded. So in the end ,comparing both types of
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 and considering the pros and cons,I will opt in favour of private
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 for the sake of prestigious
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 and recognition of the school.
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