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Some people believe that we cannot learn anything from the past for our life today, while others believe that history is a valuable source of information to understand human's life. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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The Number of people is of opinion that
history
 can not give us anything new or better from the past in today,s
life
 while others are of the thought that precious information and lessons can we learn from it.I think both our past
history
 as well as
science
 and
technologies
 of present have their own place in human
life
 and will elaborate
further
 in
next
 paragraphs.
Firstly
,
History
 is a part of human evaluation and by learning it we can compare our past and recognize what we have achieved so far and what sacrifices and struggles had done our ancestors.
secondly
, we can learn about the culture and traditions of the past as well as art and crafts of the past from the
history
 and stages of industrial and scientific development.
Furthermore
,
history
 can teach us mistakes of the past so we can avoid a repeat of those deeds again by knowing the consequences.By comparing ships of the past and present we know what revolution took place in transportation.
science
 and
technologies
 are an important part of today's
life
 and for tomorrow's future,
furthermore
,
science
 and
technologies
 bring new inventions and techniques for making
life
 more comfortable,
additionally
 giving speed and foundation for industrial development.Those subjects provide the necessary skills and education needed for the information technology and software industry
thus
 making them ready for the job market.Computer and the internet have made the world a global village by bringing people just one fingertip away which came from the technological revolution. Considering the above-mentioned information for my
science
 and
technologies
, as well as
history
,
history
 is equally important for human
life
 and development, so I will give the same weightage on both the subjects and work hard to keep balance.
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