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Some people say it is more important to plant trees in the open spaces in towns and cities than to build more housing. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Some
people
 think it is
important
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more important
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 to plant
trees
 in towns or cities than to build more housing. I totally agree with
this
 idea.
In many
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 countries of the world have
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a violation
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violation
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violations
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in
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of
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 the ecological balance in the fauna and flora. All
this
 going on because
of
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apply
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some
people
 do not protect and
halp
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help
 environment. In the world have many factories
when
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that
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spoil
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spoiling
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 the air and produce a lot of garbage. In
this
 way, many
plants
 and animals do not live with
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a human
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human
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humans
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. In the cities and towns have many cars when
reduce
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reducing
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 the air and some
people
 have problems with health.
For example
, a lot of
me
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my
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 friends have problems with their
airway
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airways
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 and they wear masks.
This
 is
problem
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a problem
the problem
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 can be solved if
people
 will
to
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apply
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plant
trees
 or
plants
 in
the
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apply
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open places in
the
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apply
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their town or city. Many
spacies
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species
trees
 and
plants
 can give fresh air when
breathe
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breathing
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people
. In my opinion,
what
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apply
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people
 should
to
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apply
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plant many
trees
 and
plants
 in their cities and should use
less
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fewer
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 cars.
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