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Many university students live with their families, while others live away from home because their universities are in different places. What are the advantages and disadvantages both situations.

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Firstly
 I think these both situations a lot of time to be. Because
students
 choices differently than, nowadays
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students
 decide that they study outside their countries.
Students
 that their
families
 have been they are not a lot of problems, because they again live that simply lives there are not change lifestyle or their agendas
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 because they decide to simply lives and easy style.
Secondly
, that situation other
students
 do not want or do not choose, they are sometimes not simply live, they are wanting single life because they decide that they study other countries and again other cities that they choices. I agree with both sides
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 because they decide that themselves.
Thirdly
,
students
 research that with their
families
 their advantages, they without any new sides and again they are not any problem because their parents every time with them, than disadvantages of their they are not feeling that new life and independent of decisions in their living. Of , a course
that is
 their choice.
Students
 study that themselves and others towns their advantages they have independent decisions about themselves, they are found for their new sides and again new friends with them and they travel other cities. Their disadvantages sometimes outside their countries or town and again their
families
 again without their royalty friends life. Because they a lot of think about that situation. Because all admissions are not decided research outside their region and without their lovely bodies or
families
. Both situations are difficult in their own right, These situations everybody should be independent.
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