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Some people believe that study is important to success; others say that there tis no relation between study and success. Discuss both views. Give your opinion based on your experience

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Education is the key to success. To achieve a goal it is important to get knowledge about it.
That is
also
 true that some people reach their destination unexpectedly. Both points are discussed in the
further
 essay.
To begin
 with, education is the process to be on a better path to achieve the goal.
In addition
, it plays a huge role in the journey of improvement.
For instance
, Sundar
pichai
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 got a degree in IT and gets a job in a high-level position at Google.
Also
, the benefit of education is in always been
the
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beneficial way.
On the other hand
, some people believe that that's not necessary to study for achievement. Many of the people who work hard and logically
also
 reach their destination of them.
However
, it takes a lot of time and effort to make the best of the journey. In the conclusion, I believe that for achievement to study is important to make our future in better shape.
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