In the past, people wore their traditional clothes and followed their culture. These days, most people wear similar clothes and therefore look very similar to one another. Do you think this is a positive or a negative development?
In the past,
people
used to wear their traditional clothing to preserve their culture which represents their identity and ancestors' behaviors
. Nowadays, Change the spelling
behaviours
majority
of the Correct article usage
the majority
people
in the world
wear the same types of clothes
that are difficult to distinguish each others
. I Change to a singular noun
other
also
believe this
new trend brings us many advantages that outnumber it's
disadvantages so I will describe its benefits and argue drawbacks with reasons in Correct your spelling
its
this
essay.
Firstly
, people
started wearing modern costumes when they knew those are convenient with every places
because they can move freely with those and feel very comfortable. Change to a singular noun
place
Secondly
, those clothes
are economically profitable because they can be mass-produced with machines unlike
most traditional dresses which are time-consuming and cost more because of manpower. So Add the comma(s)
,unlike
people
normally choose modern costumes as they are cheaper than traditional outfits. Lastly
, wearing similar outfits across different countries across the world
reduces a lot of dress-based discrimination.
On the other point of the view, there are still few
drawbacks Correct article usage
a few
for
Change preposition
to
this
and one of the main concerns is that some people
afraid
their traditions and cultures could disappear if Add a missing verb
are afraid
people
didn't wear traditional clothes
anymore. And just like they worry, most of
teens and youths in the Change preposition
apply
world
doesn't even know their culture and traditional outfit's names. However
, this
type of problems
can be reduced because Fix the agreement mistake
problem
people
still wear their traditional clothing in their cultural ceremonies which are holding
every year.
In conclusion, wearing modern Wrong verb form
held
clothes
that
is
similar to each other across the Change the verb form
are
world
have many benefits that can beat it's
drawbacks and some of them can be solved by Replace the word
its
above
reasons. Modern Correct article usage
the above
consumes
are comfortable, economical and prevent discrimination among Replace the word
consumers
people
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