In the past, people wore their traditional clothes and followed their culture. These days, most people wear similar clothes and therefore look very similar to one another. Do you think this is a positive or a negative development?

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In the past,
people
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used to wear their traditional clothing to preserve their culture which represents their identity and ancestors'
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. Nowadays,
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of the
people
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in the
world
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wear the same types of
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that are difficult to distinguish each
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. I
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believe
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new trend brings us many advantages that outnumber
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disadvantages so I will describe its benefits and argue drawbacks with reasons in
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essay.
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,
people
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started wearing modern costumes when they knew those are convenient with every
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because they can move freely with those and feel very comfortable.
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, those
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are economically profitable because they can be mass-produced with machines
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most traditional dresses which are time-consuming and cost more because of manpower. So
people
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normally choose modern costumes as they are cheaper than traditional outfits.
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, wearing similar outfits across different countries across the
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reduces a lot of dress-based discrimination. On the other point of the view, there are still
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drawbacks
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and one of the main concerns is that some
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afraid
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their traditions and cultures could disappear if
people
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didn't wear traditional
clothes
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anymore. And just like they worry, most
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teens and youths in the
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doesn't even know their culture and traditional outfit's names.
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,
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type of
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can be reduced because
people
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still wear their traditional clothing in their cultural ceremonies which are
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every year. In conclusion, wearing modern
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that
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similar to each other across the
world
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have many benefits that can beat
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drawbacks and some of them can be solved by
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the above
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reasons. Modern
consumes
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are comfortable, economical and prevent discrimination among
people
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.
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