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Cities around the world are continuing to expand as people leave the countryside. Some people prefer to live in the city while others prefer to live in the countryside. Discuss both views

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Cities are extending day by day due to the emigration of the population from the countryside. while some people including me prefer to live in big urban
areas
, others
claim
 that living in rural
areas
 would be better. I will argue both sides and give the advantages. On the on hand, every facility in megacities is easier to access rather than in the countryside, as cities are more focused on by the government.
For example
, in a large
city
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 you could find more well-equipped hospitals and shopping centres than in a village.
Additionally
, with significant development in transport system infrastructures commuting is more convenient and achievable.
For example
, it is more comfortable and quite faster to use a suburban train to go to your workplace and get back home.
On the other hand
, some individuals
claim
 that in villages you are more likely to breathe fresh air and the environment might be more clear in which there would be less trash. In contradiction I would say, a correct outlook for
city
 management would lead to a less polluted
city
.
For instance
, conducting a program that educates people about separating their trash, or extending the transport system. Another
claim
 about rural
areas
 that must be considered is that local people
claim
 that they have better sources of organic and natural food.
Although
, nowadays according to urban people’s demand healthy and organic food is available in hypermarkets which are usually placed in big urban
areas
. To conclude, I restate that the advantages of living in a
city
such
 as accessible facilities will certainly outweigh the other side for rural
areas
.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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