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These days, too many people maintain their health by relying on doctors and medicine,rather than by following a healthy lifestyle. Do you agree or disagree?

#people #health #doctors #medicine #lifestyle
Yes ,of course, nowadays many people maintain doctors and again
medicine
.
Firstly
, I think everyone following a healthy
lifestyle
 because
this
 way useful and again very trusty. If
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someone
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 follows a healthy diet and again
lifestyle
,
this
person
 is not any doctors or
medicine
. If
who
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someone
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 is not follows a healthy
behavior
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behaviour
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 that
person
 always need
doctor
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a doctor
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 or
medicine
. Professional doctors and professors every time recommend to the population that, follow a healthy
lifestyle
 and always exercise with sport or running in the morning 20 minutes. Scientists always say that eat right things and beneficial meals, Scientists say again don't eat fast food or drink water with gas. If who wants lives a lot of time following a healthy
lifestyle
. I agree with
ideas
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the ideas
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 that scientists
,
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 because they said useful
informations
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information
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.
Secondly
 if who is not follows healthy
lifestyle
this
person
 has
a
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an
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oflot
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lot
 health problems issues.
Then
this
 body often goes to hospital or
medicine
 for himself. Many populations at work are not physically active, because they are sometimes ill with hands problems or legs.
Thirdly
 if who decides healthy eating habits than again healthy
lifestyle
 choices that
person
 every time has seen young and again bonny shows, because I recommend to everyone that following healthy
lifestyle
 and every day running around in the morning
then
have
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 breakfast with useful foods than go to job. After I believe everyone's life being great.
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