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Advantages and disadvantages of learning a foreign language at primary school

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We live in an advanced and globalised world which necessitates that all people must learn a foreign
language
 to cope with the modern trend. The optimum age for learning a new
language
 is a matter of public debate which in my opinion is better to start as early as possible as the advantages of it are far more than the disadvantages. On one hand, the main disadvantages of teaching children another
language
 at primary school are that -
firstly
, it could affect their ability to learn their mother tongue properly and they might get confused by learning many different languages with different grammar and pronunciation at the same
time
.
Secondly
, it could be a waste of their study
time
 which could be spent on learning core subjects
such
 as mathematics, sciences, technology etc.
Finally
, the learning of
foreign
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language
 adds more loads on these young kids and takes some of their fun
time
.
On the other
hand
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 knowing a foreign
language
 at a young age is easier and need less
time
 than learning at an older age. The children could pick up the pronunciation more easily as they learn it
sub-consciously
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.
Also
, they learn with no
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 and talk freely without any fear of making mistakes.
Moreover
 teaching young children foreign
language
 has a positive impact on their personality as it broadens their horizon and improves their social skills in dealing with foreign people and exposing them
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wide range of cultures.
Furthermore
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 they will benefit from knowing a foreign
language
 in their upcoming studies and work career as well, and still, they could find learning
new
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language
 enjoyable
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: use some games and illustration for them as a teaching method. In conclusion, learning, an international
language
 is
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 skill that I think
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should be starting at primary school as the benefits outweigh the drawbacks.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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