Educaiton should be accessible to people of all economic backgrounds. All levels of educaiton, from primary school to tertiary education, should be free. To what extent do you agree with this opinion?

Education
is the most powerful weapon which you can use to change the world” was a quote from the famous freedom fighter Nelson Mandela. In the end,
education
itself can be divided
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two major disciplines. The Western and Eastern
education
systems
. Despite
of
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their similarities, these two
systems
have distinct differences that can’t be ignored when people take a closer look at them.
First
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difference is the way of teaching. While
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Western
education
emphasizes
on
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understanding,
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Eastern
education
emphasizes
on
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memorizing.
For example
,
students
learn from memorizing facts from their books or solving one exercise after another. In the end, there is still the danger that
students
might not understand the knowledge, but just
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from the teachers. In Western countries, the teachers spend a lot of time
to make
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sure that the
students
have fully
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their lessons. They spend more time
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class and group
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in order to know how to speak up logically and learn to accept other people’s opinions, which is
also
time-consuming. The
second
difference is the way how the teacher and the school treat each
students
interests
. In Wester,
students
are highly recommended to have their own
hobbies
and the schools
also
offer different activities for them. In contrary to the eastern
education
system
, where learning is the most important thing for the
students
and
hobbies
not related to learning are not encouraged. Through
this
example, people can have a better insight into the
education
system
and understand
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society.
Last
but not least, Eastern and Western
education
systems
produce variant characters. The East produces individuals who have good academic results but with a lack of
hobbies
and
interests
outside their studies. In the meantime,
Western
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education
system
produces
students
with diverse
interests
and many different
hobbies
.
However
, their academic results are might not as perfect as their different
interests
.
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, while the West focuses on
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, the East focuses on the whole. To conclude, both
systems
have their own advantages and disadvantages. As the Western
system
focuses on building up
students
with a diversity of
interests
, the East focuses on
students
with potential ability. In
this
way, each of the
system
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wants the best for the
students
and there is no “best”
education
system
in
this
sense.
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