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Do you think it is better for students to work before their university study? Why? Use reasons and specific examples to support your choice.

#students #work #university #study #support #choice
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Never before have we seen so many youngsters finding a job before their
university
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studies
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. From my point of view,
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 tendency is a double-edged sword.
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 with, I think that children who
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 before their educational program, usually are more mature than others. To be more precise,
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 people learn how to face difficulties either in their jobs or their life generally, in
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 way they would be more ready in their professional career after the
university
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. From my personal experience, I was working as a receptionist in a business before I start my
university
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 life and I acquired a lot of experience with computer programs. Something like that was so useful to me, as when I graduated from
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 and I find a job in my field, I had to use many of the programs that already knew how to use them.
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,
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 trend is essential for some
students
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 who cannot afford their
studies
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.
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, boys and girls whose parents struggle to make ends meet and are impossible to afford their kids'
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, need to find a job in order to save money for their tuition fees.
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 rampant trend has a negative effect. I am of the belief that many
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 dump their
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 because of
work
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. A clear illustration of
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 could be said to be recent research has shown that the highest percentage of
students
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 who dump their
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 are those who
work
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 before their
university
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 life. To sum up, it is an anticlimax to exist people who quit their
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 because they have to
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 in order
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 to save money. I believe that only through the concerted effort of governments can
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 issue be stamped out.
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, people in power could give an allowance to
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 who cannot afford it.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • preparation
  • mature
  • responsibility
  • teamwork
  • communication
  • critical thinking
  • problem-solving
  • adaptability
  • self-discipline
  • time management
  • organizational skills
  • career exploration
  • financial independence
  • work ethic
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