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It is believed that women are more suited to child-rearing than men. What is your opinion on this issue?

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I think that a
woman
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 can nurture their
children
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 better than a man. In the forthcoming, I will be discussing my opinion and conclude the subject.
To begin
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 with, the
woman
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 who feeds, care and protects their
children
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. A
mother
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 will go extend to all the levels to keep away from harm. Mothers keep a child for nine months to give birth. During pregnancy, it seems that a strong bond between a
mother
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 and child.
Children
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 reached out to mothers than a father. It may be because they spend a lot of
time
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 with a
mother
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. Offsprings are attached both emotionally and mentally to their
mother
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. A
woman
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 shows emotions while men keep their emotions themselves.
For example
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, if both parents have work commitments but still a
mother
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 finds a way to spend
time
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 with their
children
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.
On the other hand
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, a father is busy outside to earn living for their family. A
woman
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 does most of the work of their offspring and at the same
time
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 will take care of the family too. A
mother
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 educates their
children
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 ,
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moreover
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,moreover
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 a parent gets more
time
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 with their
children
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, makes a good relationship between a
mother
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 and a child.
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, a
mother
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 keeps a lot of emotions for their
children
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.
Children
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 are more attached to their mothers.
For instance
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, a married couple with
children
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 gets divorced, a court always gives judgement in the favour of a
mother
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 and provide custody of their
children
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 to a
mother
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. To conclude, since birth
children
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 are more attached with their
mother
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. A
mother
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 pampers their
children
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 and taught them.

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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • child-rearing
  • caregiver
  • social constructs
  • nurturing
  • gender roles
  • stereotypes
  • paternity leave
  • co-parenting
  • development
  • economic pressures
  • primary caregiver
  • gender biases
  • fluidity of roles
  • societal norms
  • inherent differences
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