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Nowadays more task at home and work are being performed by robots. Why do you think this is happening? Is it a positive or negative development?

#home #work #robots #development
These days,
robots
 have more
significat
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significant
 roles to handle some
work
 both in home and office.
This
 is due to
increasing
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 of
people
's workload and it can be seen as a positive development because it
help
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people
 to get
more
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a more
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 comfortable life.
People
 become
more busy
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 these days, so they need help, especially for some
work
 that
people
 tend to forget.  So when
people
 see that there
is
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 many things
in
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on
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their
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to do
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 list, that become a new demand for
extra
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 hand to help their
work
. And there
come
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 the technology that now become so
advance
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advanced
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 that can support and answer that demand.
For example
, in
Japan
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 there
is
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are
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robots
 who take the order and serve the guest in the restaurant. They invented the
robots
 because there is
certain
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 demand for that specific task when the restaurant become so dense with customers. As I mentioned before
this
 situation will give
positive
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 impact because it makes our life easier. If
robots
 already take care
our
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 daily routine we can have spare time
for
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to
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do
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doing
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 other things or even make time for
ourself
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ourselves
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.
Also
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 there
are
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is
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 sort type of
work
 that
people
 don't like to do it manually so when
this
 can
perfomed
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performed
 by
robots
 it will boost
people
 mood and can increase happiness index.
For example
, doing laundry,
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 actually
simple
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a simple
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 task but imagine if you should
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this
in
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at
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 the weekend when actually you can use that spare time
for
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to
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take
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 a rest.
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