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Some people believe that childhood is the best stage of happiness . While others believe that a person can enjoy more happiness in other stages of life. Discuss both views and give your opinion?

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The early years are considered as the best years of
every one's
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 life whereas it
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 by the statement that individuals have more fun while growing towards other stages of
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life. I believe that every stage has its own fun time. In
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i
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 will discuss every aspect. On one hand, during
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babyhood person contain so much potential to get up on different things, experiencing and
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 the world around
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. Kids even do not give it a thought before trying new things. But on
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 side childhood is considered
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vulnerable
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 time period where children always need someone nearby them for
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assistance
. On other hand, as
person
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tranform
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transform
 from a child to a
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up
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 he or she goes through so many stages. They get more independent.
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