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Several individuals are of the view that having worldwide sports

games

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is beneficial to the state whereas others think

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is not good. I am of the opinion that hosting sporting

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is of great benefit to the country. The essay below will discuss both views at length.

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and foremost, having

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in a country may attract a

lot

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of tourists thereby leading to development because

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events bring more money.

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, I support the idea of hosting worldwide

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, in 2007 South Africa hosted the World Cup, which attracted a

lot

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of tourists from all over the universe. A study conducted by certain students showed that there was a 15 per cent growth in the tourism sector and more than seven stadiums were developed. If it were not for the world cup

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development was not going

to happen

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On the other hand

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, hosting international sports is seen as bad because it brings a

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crime

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to the country of the host.

This

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view does not hold water because borders can tighten rules and police can ensure the safety of everyone.

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, when Tunisia hosted the African Cup of Nations in 2000, little

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was reported as soldiers and police guarded everywhere and everyone.

Therefore

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crime

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can be controlled during

such

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events. In conclusion, I support that international

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are a great advantage to the state of the host as it brings development and increment

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the tourism sector.

However

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, some people do not think so as they are of the thought that

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occasions bring a

lot

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crime

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. These and other views have been discussed in the essay above.

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Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

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Lexical resource: 7.0

Varied vocabulary

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Grammatical Range: 7.0

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