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In some countries, owning a home rather than renting one is very important for people. Why might this be the case? Do you think this is positive or negative situation?

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In the majority of
the
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countries, People thinks having their own
home
 is far better than the rented one for various reasons. In my opinion, we can consider
this
 a positive vibe for the country.
Firstly
, having your own building has a lot of advantages for many reasons. A family doesn't need to pay the rent every month and they can build their
home
 as per their needs and taste,
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however
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 to start building a new
home
 is a challenging task for lower and middle-class families, because a monthly EMI will be higher than the rent they pay every month. Due to ,
this
 they cannot afford of having their own
home
 and it will remain a dream only for many families.
On the other hand
, as the population ,spikes the cost of the properties rises exponentially. ,
Furthermore
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 it becomes a difficult task to purchase a property. ,
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 some people travel frequently due to their job purpose, So they cannot buy or build a
home
 at a specific location. Employment opportunities will get created on the real estate side. To Summarize, A family having their own
home
 is always a good option because it will be useful at any point in time and even we can get a tax benefit on the
home
 loans as well. So,
instead
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 we can spend that money on our own property.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • ownership
  • renting
  • importance
  • sense of security
  • stability
  • financial investment
  • asset
  • customize
  • decorate
  • belonging
  • community
  • potential
  • future generations
  • long-term
  • cost advantage
  • control
  • living space
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