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In some parts of the world, the rate of divorce has increased dramatically over the past few decades. Explain some possible reasons for this problem and suggest some solutions.

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In the past divorce was unacceptable.It has been observed by many that nowadays, a ratio of
a divorces
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is growing swiftly compared to the past.There are
a
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several
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severals
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several
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 reasons for
such
 a situation,
also
 some primitive steps can be taken to solve
this
 problem.Both the causes and measures are elaborated
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.
To begin
 with, the foremost one is the join family.To explain it, we can see that today's everywhere has a trend to a nuclear family, where couples can stay
comfertable
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comfortable
instead
 of
big
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 family.in a join family has chances to fight for
an equalities
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equality
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,foods, house
chors
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, kids as well as elders,
this
 types of causes can
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as a
sapretion
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separation
 .Another one is
the
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extramarital affairs to explicate it, in
the
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modern time half of the folks who
has
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 extra affairs
out
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outside
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 of a home,
they
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are not loyal
with
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to
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 a partner.
For example
,in 2019, it was revealed by America that 80% of
couples
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couples'
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 divorce reasons were
extra marital
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extramarital
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 affairs.
Hence
, a growing divorces rate is becoming
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major situation in the world.
On the other hand
, some steps can be taken to solve
this
 problem.
Firstly
, couples who have
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issue
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issues
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 regarding family problems
they
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must solve
it
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them
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.could share everything
to
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 each other and
also
 family members should encourage them, they should motivate them about their
kids
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 future.For
instace
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instance
, 90% of
indian
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 parents do not get a
separates
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 only for their
childern
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children
,
although
 they have a problem with each
others
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.
Secondly
, they should spend more time with each other
like
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,can arrange a trip or small vacation
in
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 the weekends, and
also
 should feel special to each
others
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 Through it may be they do not get attracted
with
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another
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one another
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. In conclusion, the number of divorces is increasing day by day
with
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 various reasons.
However
, it can be
decline
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declined
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 by some measures like
,
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 understanding spending times
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