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In spite of the advance is made in agriculture many people around the world still go hungry. why is this the case? What can be done about this problem ?

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Nowadays, technology has been advanced in science and technology even in
agriculture
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the agriculture
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 field.Even
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though
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thought
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though
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 technology has been advanced in
agriculture
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the agriculture
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 sector ,most
people
 around the
global
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globe
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 do not have enough
food
. These as
a
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apply
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will be discussed the possible reason and put forward several
solution
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solutions
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 to reduce
this
 issue.
To begin
 with,
main
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the main
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 reason for
this
problem
 is that inflation and ignorance of
government
.
In other words
 ,everything from clothes to
food
 becomes of costly that it is
it is
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easy for a big family to earn and spend a lot of money on
food
.
Additionally
,
government
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the government
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 does not take any action on
this
problem
 result of these many
people
 do not have money to buy
food
.
For instance
, according to
survey
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a survey
the survey
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of
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by
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 a Times newspaper, 55
percentage
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per cent
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 of
people
 in
india
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India
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 sleep empty stomach and the
government
 Shelters do not take action to solve
this
problem
.
Nevertheless
, there are potential solutions that have
help
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helped
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 in minimising
this
problem
.
Firstly
government
 should put a check on the price of
food
. Any basic eatable items should not be sold
more
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for more
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 than the MRP.
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example
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 bread should not be sold for more than 10 as it is a basic necessity.
Secondly
in
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charges
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charge
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 of
government
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the government
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 Shelters should
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be prepared
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prepared
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prepare
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in
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for
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a
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food
a portion of food
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food
 for everyone in the shelter.
These
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This
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 way
people
 cannot sleep without
food
.
Such
 as, steps can reduce the number of
people
 who are still hungry. To sum up, price rise and
government
 carelessness are the reasons why
people
 are still hungry.
However
,
government
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the government
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 can significantly help in reducing
this
 matter.
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