Some countries are struggling with an increase in crime rates. Many people think that having more police on the streets is the only way to reduce crime. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

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has become one of the most negative

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in many cities. Some people said the only

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to solve these

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is to increase the manpower in

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headquarters should increase more men working

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in a fast and effective

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can help the local citizens feel secure around where they live, and

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reduce the unemployment rate in the city.

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to do illegal

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without being seen by the

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in the city,

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report from the civilian. In conclusion, increasing the manpower in some

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stations may reduce the

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Coherence and Cohesion: 5.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

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Lexical resource: 4.0

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Grammatical Range: 4.0

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