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Many people believe that educational standards have declined in recent times, particularly in the areas of literacy and numeracy. Discuss the causes of this problem and offer possible solutions to it.

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There is an ongoing debate about the fact that these days level of the education system has declined significantly especially ,in some areas
such
 as literacy and numeracy . In
this
 essay , I will discuss the causes of
this
 problem and propose some solutions .
To begin
 with ,
one
 of the main factors contributing to
this
 big
issue
 is the population .
That is
 to say , in most parts of the world particularly in developing countries people are not taught some standards of living
such
 as having only
one
 or two children
instead
 of more than that , clearly
this
 problem cause many children to end up not having the ability to educate only because there is not enough space for them . What's more, the lack of qualified teachers
also
 can lead to poor education .
For example
 , poor teaching transfer wrong information which misguides students and can be really harmful to their future education and career.
Secondly
 , the lack of suitable infrastructure and poor educational facilities make children not benefit from acquiring sufficient knowledge .
For instance
 , mathematics is
one
 of the important subjects in school which need some facilities in order to make the contents more understandable for pupils .
One
 of the solutions to
this
 problem is to focus on more qualified teachers and provide useful tutorial classes and sessions to increase other teachers' knowledge so as to eliminate false teaching . Another way to deal with
this
issue
 is to subsidize schools and assist them in order to update the facilities . In conclusion, it goes without saying that there are a significant number of factors which is associated with
this
issue
 .
However
 , to tackle
this
issue
 all of us need to pay attention to
this
 area and raise our awareness in order to make it a better place for the acquisition of knowledge.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Globalization
  • Numeracy
  • Literacy
  • Standardized testing
  • Economic disparities
  • Inequality
  • Underprivileged communities
  • Immediate gratification
  • Foundational subjects
  • Professional development
  • Holistic approach
  • Comprehensive reforms
  • Socio-economic background
  • Engaged
  • Traditional methods
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