Some people think that the best way to reduce crime is to give longer prisoner sentence. Others think that there are better alternative ways to reduce crime. Discuss both views and give your opinion your opinion

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Nowadays, it's very often argued that the
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in crime rates and the variety of
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crime's formats. Meanwhile, governments and many international organizations keep working on some solutions to reduce
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rates and problems. According to some
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one of these solutions is to give longer
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while others think about more effective alternative ways to counteract
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problem. As it's a topic to be discussed, I'll delve into
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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