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Living in a country where you have to speak a foreign language can cause serious social as well as practical problems. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

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With
globalisisation
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globalisation
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, it has become a popular trend among
people
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 to migrate to different nations. These immigrants face social challenges and other problems due to
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language
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barrier
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.
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why it is completely preposterous to adapt to
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 an environment. On the one hand, some
people
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 like the experience that comes with learning
local
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a local
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 dialect.
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 is justified by the friendly interactions that
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 from the local community when a non-resident makes effort to learn a new
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, improving
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interrelation between the foreigners and the local community.
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, wrong pronunciation makes the locals happy.
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, these happy moments strengthen the bond between
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.
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, learning
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the local
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language
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 brings
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 of equality to both parties. For
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 reason, local members do not feel inferior or intimidated and become more affectionate
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to
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.
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, treating the foreigners as part of the general populace.
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,
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barrier
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 can cause loneliness. A key reason for remaining for interacting with
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 is that loneliness is bad for our health. As we can become depressed and anxious, which can
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 lead to
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problem
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problems
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, many elderly
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 die soon after they
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loose
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 their wife or husband. Because being lonely gets a great toll on them.
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, it's difficult to offer good service if you are unable to communicate to
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 customers.
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 of
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, government
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 out on income collected as tax from foreign investors who are unable to
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 goods to locals due to
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barrier
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, leading to poor economic growth for the country. To sum up,
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language
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the language
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barrier
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 can negatively impact social interactions and other cause challenges to
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a certain
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part
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 of life.
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 it can lead to poor health conditions
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depression
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as depression
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 and deter
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 investors,
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,
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the government
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loosing
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losing
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 out on extra income. I believe
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the communication
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barrier
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 is entirely justified.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • linguistic proficiency
  • cross-cultural communication
  • miscommunication
  • social integration
  • linguistic alienation
  • cultural dissonance
  • language acquisition
  • communication breakdown
  • interpreter services
  • language courses
  • bilingualism
  • multilingualism
  • language barrier
  • effective communication
  • cultural assimilation
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