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International community should act immediately to encourage countries to reduce the consumption of fossil fuels, such as oil and gas. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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The consumption of fossil
fuels
 increasingly drawing everyone’s attention. International communities are supposed to handle
such
problem
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. It is certain that they should take immediate actions to encourage
countries
 to
comsume
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consume
less
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fewer
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 fossil
fuels
.
Countires
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Countries
Counties
 should discuss
this
matter
 thoroughly under communities’
organazation
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organization
 and act upon consensus. It is well
ackwnoledged
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acknowledged
 that the reduction is urgent, but different
countries
 have different difficulties facing
this
matter
. Fossil fuel
comsuption
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consumption
 polluted our environment worldwide.
Green house
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Greenhouse
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 gas emitted while fuel burnt causing great problems. Meanwhile, fossil
fuels
 themselves are non-regenerable, which means the more we consume now the less we can use in the future.
However
, fossil
fuels
 are still the most
effiecient
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efficient
 energy which makes
it
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them
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 difficult to reduce. Different
countries
 facing different kinds of problems in
this
matter
. There are developing
countries
which
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that
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 need
great
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 amount of energy to get developed, even to eliminate poverty in their
countries
. It is hard to push them when they still have starving kids to feed. And different
countries
 have
different
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 economic
structure
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structures
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 which
lead
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 to their different dependency on fossil
fuels
. Some
countries
 even have great income by
export
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exporting
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 fossil
fuels
, while other
countries
 outsourced all their industry and only consume little fossil
fuels
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fuel
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. Given these differences, it is hard to come up with
an
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 definite, non-
negosiable
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negotiable
 plan for the whole world to follow.
Instead
, international communities should arrange meetings for
countires
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countries
 to express their own concern and
disscuss
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discuss
 the
matter
 on their own behalf. Given the fact fossil
fuels
 consumption is a global issue, different leaders will eventually come up with temporary plans and will have measures to encourage every
countries
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country
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 to act
immediatly
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immediately
.
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