Government investment in the arts, such as music and theatre, is a waste of money. Governments must invest this money in public services instead.
A number of people support the idea that the governments should not spend much money on the
arts
including music
and theatre because they are useless, and they encourage that the authorities must invest this
money in public services instead
. I strongly disagree with this
viewpoint for various reasons, described in the following paragraphs before the conclusion is reached.
It is undeniable that the arts
such
as music
and movie are playing a vital role in human life for a variety of reasons. For example
, music
can contribute to many citizens from their worse feeling when facing some trouble problems to happier than before they to listen
some songs. Add the preposition
tolisten
In addition
, almost music
industries in various countries such
as Korea are growing nowadays as they have a lot of fans that represent music
as one of the crucial stories in people's lives as same as others.
On the other hand
, not only do the arts
are important to the life of folk but they also
help about economy
of the country. Add an article
the economy
In other words
, if the populations
Change to a genitive case
population's
populations'
Add a missing verb
is interest
interest
in some songs or movies, they will Replace the word
interested
Add a missing verb
be interest
interest
in these languages and cultures. Wrong verb form
interested
Moreover
, the authorities can use this
advantage to promote their countries in order to share their traditional cultures or invite many tourists to travel to their areas that cause can increase countries
financial, and some areas are recorded as one of the most picturesque places in the world.
To conclude, I indeed disagree with the opinion being that government investment or support of the Change noun form
countries'
country's
arts
is a waste of the country's treasure since it seems to me that the advantages of supporting the arts
outweigh the disadvantages.Submitted by justoranat on
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