In twenty years there will be fewer cars in use than there are today. Do you agree or disagree?

Nowadays the
use
of
cars
is at
their
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peak, almost everyone has their own
cars
and I have seen if there are 3 or 4 family members in a house
then
there are
also
3 or 4
cars
for each one.
However
,
in
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incoming
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coming
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time
for instance
in the
next
20 years the
use
of
cars
will be less than today. In my
opinion
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I completely concur with the statement. I think
this
way for two reasons; the more
use
of bicycles and more
use
of air flights, these I will examine in
this
essay.
To begin
with, I contend that
the
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people are using cycles more than the earlier
time
, and their interest in using
it
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is
also
increasing day by day. People
also
prefer using carpooling
instead
of going alone in a
car
. Carpooling saves
time
and money. My own personal experience is the best example of
this
. Earlier I used to go to the office and for any work by
car
,
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since I like driving, so I always prefer to
use
a
car
. But these sedentary lifestyles make me obese slowly and suddenly I release I am not doing good for my health. I instantly quit the habit of using a
car
for nearby places and now prefer to go by bicycle. Even
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places
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in the range of 10 to 15 km I try to
use
my bicycle.
This
habit solves all my health issues and without doing any gym or exercise I have
loosen
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my extra weight. Now I feel very happy about
this
.
Secondly
, in today's
scenario
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the number of air flights has increased so much that people are
also
starting to prefer them
instead
of
cars
. In the
next
20
years
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the surge of air flight will
also
increase.
For instance
, my friend is leaving around 200km far from my place and one day she plans to visit me.
Instead
of a
car
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she preferred to come via
flight
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to meet me and we get an extra 3 to 4 hrs. extra to babble. And flights cost almost the same as the
car
does but
also
saves
time
. In conclusion, I strongly believe that in the
next
20 years the
use
of
cars
will be less than they are used today.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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