Many manufactured food and drink products contain high levels of sugar, which causes many health problems. Sugary products should be made more expensive to encourage people to consume less sugar. Do you agree or disagree?

Nowadays it is well known that many
health
issues are caused by overconsumption of
sugar
, which is on many proceed
products
. Many
people
suggest
to
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the price
on
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these
products
to discourage consumers from buying them. In my opinion,
this
will not solve the problem, but the government should focus on
people
's education
instead
. According to me, making sugary
products
expensive is not the appropriate solution, as many
people
will suffer from buying even basic foods and drinks.
Although
sugar
is a harmful ingredient, it is found in bread or juice, so what will happen if the price of bread
increase
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? Once
this
will happen, a large number of families are going to have a hard time
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buying
grocery
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. A
rregular
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regular
family,
for instance
, with two or three kids, which has low income,
this
rise
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sugary
products
, in order to protect
people
from
health
issues will make them feel
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to survive
instead
.
On the contrary
,
public
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should be informed about the
problems
that high levels of
sugar
consumption can cause
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their bodies. The government, from
early
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years, should educate
in
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schools about
health
problems
due to
sugar
.
such
as diabetes, heart
problems
, obesity etc.
Therefore
, pupils will be free to make
the
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suitable decision for their bodies, provided that they know every consequence of their choice. In conclusion, just making foods and drinks expensive will not only solve the problem
,
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but will cause more. In my point of view, the best way to encourage
people
to consume less
sugar
,
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is by making them
to
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choose it by themselves, as long as, they are informed
for
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the
health
problems
that it can cause, and not
to
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be imposed.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • health problems
  • manufactured food and drink products
  • sugary products
  • excessive sugar consumption
  • discourage
  • promote
  • healthier choices
  • reduce
  • increased taxes
  • fund
  • health education
  • prevention programs
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