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Some people believe that unpaid community service should be a compulsory part of high school programmes (for example working for a charity, improving the neighborhood or teaching sports to younger children). Do you agree or disagree?

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Nowadays, most individuals think free social
services
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 as assisting charities, improving rural areas, and teaching sports should be included in the high
school
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 education system. Personally, I completely disagree with
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 idea because it will affect the study of
students
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 in
school
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. Specifical, the main reason is
students
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 have own responsibilities,
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 as homework or studying for an extra hour because
students
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 have many subjects in
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 to study within a limited period of
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.
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, their education could be more tired and neglected.
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, in my
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, some
students
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 who participated in a few clubs in the period
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 have dropped out of class because they could not balance the
time
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 between studying and aiding their club.
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, during
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time
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 period, the majority of
students
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 are immature. Because they are unable to efficiently manage service programs, they may experience challenges and discontent when carrying out
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 duties, among others.
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, it would
instill
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 a bad attitude toward unpaid
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 duty from a young age.
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, they may lose interest in providing
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 kinds of
services
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 in the future.
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, another main reason is that the government should plan ahead of
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 and encourage spending.
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, a student’s responsibilities may be reduced. In Japan,
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, the government frequently assists people in
community
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services
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.
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, everyone has all benefits from
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, especially people who live in the countryside. In conclusion, free
community
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 activities for youths should not be mandatory, it is the responsibility of the government.
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 of unpaid work
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 as free
community
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services
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, schools should prioritize the studying of
students
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