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Some people believe that unpaid community service should be a compulsory part of high school programmes (for example working for a charity, improving the neighborhood or teaching sports to younger children). Do you agree or disagree?

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Nowadays, most individuals think free social
services
such
 as assisting charities, improving rural areas, and teaching sports should be included in the high
school
 education system. Personally, I completely disagree with
this
 idea because it will affect the study of
students
 in
school
. Specifical, the main reason is
students
 have own responsibilities,
such
 as homework or studying for an extra hour because
students
 have many subjects in
school
 to study within a limited period of
time
.
As a result
, their education could be more tired and neglected.
For example
, in my
school
, some
students
 who participated in a few clubs in the period
time
 have dropped out of class because they could not balance the
time
 between studying and aiding their club.
Moreover
, during
this
time
 period, the majority of
students
 are immature. Because they are unable to efficiently manage service programs, they may experience challenges and discontent when carrying out
such
 duties, among others.
Furthermore
, it would
instill
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 a bad attitude toward unpaid
community
 duty from a young age.
As a result
, they may lose interest in providing
such
 kinds of
services
 in the future.
Furthermore
, another main reason is that the government should plan ahead of
time
 and encourage spending.
As a result
, a student’s responsibilities may be reduced. In Japan,
for example
, the government frequently assists people in
community
services
.
Then
, everyone has all benefits from
this
, especially people who live in the countryside. In conclusion, free
community
 activities for youths should not be mandatory, it is the responsibility of the government.
Instead
 of unpaid work
such
 as free
community
services
, schools should prioritize the studying of
students
. (27x)
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