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In many countries, very few young people read newspapers or follow the news on TV. What do you think are the causes of this? What solutions can you suggest? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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The illustrations reveal the design of a
park
 in 1920 and the current day. At the
first
 glance, one can say the only thing that remained the same is the size of the
park
. The vast majority of the rest has changed today. In 1920, the
park
 had a fountain in the
center
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, whereas,
this
 is replaced by a rose garden in the
center
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 and 2 of the 3 former rose gardens are eliminated from the current plan. There were 5 different seats in the old
park
 placed on the sides of the
park
 yet, those seats are not there anymore today
instead
 4 new seats are available at the sides of the
center
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 rose garden. And, the stage is
also
 taken out and a bigger
amphitheater
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 is constructed on the left side of the
park
. Moving on to the
next
 change in plan, there used to be a pond for water plants on the right corner of the
park
 to Arnold avenue which is replaced with a children’s play area. And near
this
 play area, a cafe is
also
 constructed. Apart from these renovations, the water feature is
also
 placed on the left corner of the
park
 to Eldon street where the glasshouse used to be located in 1920. One final note on the comparison, a brand new underground car parking area is
also
 constructed today and the entrance of its located on the junction between Eldon street and right side of the
park
.
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