Some people say patriotism causes problems and is negative overall. Others feel that it is beneficial for society at large. Do the advantages of patriotism outweigh its disadvantages?

Patriotism
is defined as
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affection and
specisl
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special
concern for the well being of the
country
and
willingness
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to sacrifice to promote the
counry's
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country's
good. Well, it is believed that
partiotism
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patriotism
is non-beneficial. Whereas, It is
also
said that it leads to many different problems for a
partiotic
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patriotic
person.
This
essay will monitor
partiotism
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patriotism
through both lenses.  To start with,
patriotism
promotes the public sacrifice
nacessary
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necessary
for the functioning of the state. War is
the
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patrinent
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patient
pertinent
parent
example. Soldiers often have
strong
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sense of
partiotism
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patriotism
, they
condem
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condemn
great
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the great
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belief
of
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keeping
nation's
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the nation's
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security and well being before anything else.
Moreover
,
partiotism
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patriotism
connect
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folk strongly. If Individuals believe in and are devoted to
state
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the state
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, they would
particiate
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participate
in forwarding its
strenght
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strength
and power through public services which is essential for functional goods and services.
Also
,
patriotism
also
decrease
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the
liklehood
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likelihood
of conflicts,
specially
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for
the
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country
which is plagued with
partisn
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partisan
demur. Race, religion and language differences get less important than the shared ideals and devotion
towards
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same
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nation-state.
Nevertheless
, it
also
helps to lead
country
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on the path of anti-corruption.
Patriotic
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public is less likely to
conden
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condemn
condone
corruption within the
goverment
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government
. On other hand, competing
patriotics
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patriotic
can be
extremly
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extremely
divisive.
Second
,
patriotism
makes devotees
to
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blind
faithers
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fathers
faith
which is problematic if mixed with belief that one's
country
is beyond morality.
Thirdly
,
patriotism
can be used
a
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dangerous tool by
populist
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the populist
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leader
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, who exploit their
citizens
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citizen's
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care for their own benefits. In conclusion, it would be true to say that
patriotism
inquire
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both pros cons whereas pros
definitly
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definitely
cons as it
encourage
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encourages
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country
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a country
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to grow on different levels but cons must not
underestimated
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underestimate
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at any stage.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • fosters
  • sense of belonging
  • strengthening societal bonds
  • instills
  • pride and loyalty
  • excessive
  • nationalism
  • intolerance
  • discrimination
  • conflict
  • blind allegiance
  • flawed policies
  • unifying force
  • crisis
  • manipulated
  • political leaders
  • division
  • advocating
  • responsibility
  • civic duty
  • engaged
  • informed citizenship
  • balanced and inclusive
  • cultural diversity
  • marginalize
  • minority groups
  • stifle dissent
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