Nowadays many countries have very cosmopolitan cities with people from all over the world. How can the government ensure that all the people can live together harmoniously?

Different individuals
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the freedom to choose their dwelling place in accordance
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their preferences in life.
However
, peace and order in society must
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for the residents to have
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state of harmony.
Firstly
, the government must impose and implement
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specific
rule
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and regulations
such
as respecting each other in
such
a way they could be responsible enough to obtain
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camaraderie
likewise
the harmonious
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relationship
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all.
For instance
, if other city dwellers are sleeping especially at night; others must respect the silence so that in return those
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of politeness will come back to them as well.
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, respect begets respect in any
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of gesture that each
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of
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are
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,
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event
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must be conducted
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each vicinity so that
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will get to know the neighbourhood.
For example
, a gathering in the country club by Japanese, Korean, American, and Canadian in the host country will
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a great way to have an excellent rapport
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everyone.
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, all residents will grasp a profound knowledge with regard
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different norms, cultures, and social customs that they could utilize on how to treat each other to stabilize
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peace and harmonious living.
Finally
, to maintain the peace and order of a community; police officers or security guards must be posted to each cosmopolitan
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so that everyone is aware that safety and security
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well maintained.
Consequently
, all
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residing in common areas will feel the
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of the place.
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Moreover
,
this
is the crucial way of achieving the optimum level of harmony. In summary, different nationals can live together despite
of
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individual differences as long as harmony is present all the time.
However
,
government
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must be upfront in implementing specific regulations to maintain
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a harmonious
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living.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • cosmopolitan
  • inclusive policies
  • cultural exchange
  • integration
  • community centers
  • anti-discrimination
  • awareness campaigns
  • support systems
  • diversity
  • equal opportunities
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