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Write about the following topic: Many people like to wear fashionable clothes. Why do you think this is the case? Is this a good thing or a bad thing?

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It is a common belief that many individuals have a tendency to wear fashionable
clothes
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an
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 negative effect
in
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 society.
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, I firmly believe that these things
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 a good thing because it helps
people
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 express their personal identity. The main cause of
people
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 like to wear fashionable
clothes
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 is that
people
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 want attention from other
people
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. Fashionable
clothes
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 usually
makes
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people
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 easily
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othe
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other
the
people
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's eyes. Famous
people
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 are the
one
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 who generally
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 trending
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 and it helps them to be always glamorous in front of the public.
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, not just celebrities want to
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 trending
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, young generations or even the elder
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also
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 want to
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 the attention
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 their friends. Almost
people
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who
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do not
wearing
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 fashionable
clothes
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 because they do not know how to
styling
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 their looks, not because they do not want. According to a
reccent
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recent
 survey, 90
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 of
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respondents
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 answered that they wear fashionable
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 to be more vibrant in front of everyone. But when they
at
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 home or alone,
people
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wearing
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 trending looks decline
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 5
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,
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 how appearance in public places
are
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 important to a person. Overall, I think that
this
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 is a good thing because
people
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 have their own right to express their personal
identity
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. A look of a
people
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 generally shows their characteristics.
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, showing how they treat
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other
people
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.
This
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 is a good thing because individuals have
chance
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 to express their characteristics in an undirectly way. A study in the USA has research
in
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 a group of
people
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 that usually
wearing
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 fashionable
clothes
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 why they wear in that way. 95
percent
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 of
people
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 chose that because they want
the
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others
know
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 more about their personality, which is a really high figure in a normal survey. To sum up, it is clear that
people
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 wear fashionable
clothes
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 to
catching
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 attention.
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, it is evident that
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this things
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is
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 good for the community because they have their own right to express their personal identity.
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Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

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