Money spent on space exploration is a complete waste. Governments could better spend this money money on other things to benefit the nation . To what extent do you agree or disagree

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Exploration is good but not
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, I find it
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unnecessary
and costly. Many governments have a budget for
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exploration. As in my personal opinion, there are so many things that need the attention of
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and as a point of view I find it disturbing to learn that millions of dollars are spent each year exploring the
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,
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prioritise
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on projects that are more beneficiary to the rest of the people, like giving hundred
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free education to university level, hundred
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free health care to
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including hospital plans and surgeries.
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i
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agree
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using
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on other things. The
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has been visited a couple of times
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the days of Neil Armstrong and
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believe because of that, there
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disturbances in the atmosphere causing environmental damage. Effects of global warming in a negative way have been experienced.
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I suspect that because of the negative effects of environmental disturbances that's one of the reasons the world is experiencing unexplainable and uncurable diseases. Some
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researchers
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that diseases like skin cancers and eye cancers are caused by the
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I say more
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should be invested in people's health
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so that those who need Chemotherapy can have direct access to it for free. Major surgeries that are of high
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should
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be free to its citizens. In conclusion, I say
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exploring
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should be stopped and that
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should be diverted for other use.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • complete waste
  • benefit the nation
  • technological advancements
  • foster
  • international cooperation
  • inspire
  • engage
  • boost the economy
  • long-term benefits
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